After completing all the practical work for this assignment I wanted to look back on what I have done to assess what went well and what I could have improved upon. First I wanted to revisit the story and how well that translated into the final product. I am happy with the story I came up with and I think the universe that the story is set in is interesting, I also think that the video starts the story off well with the introduction and opening scene. Where I think the story suffers is with how the black hole is discovered, I think it would have been better if the story started with Alice being aware of the black hole already and having a larger portion of the video being Alice travelling to it in a more interesting way. I also think the complete opposite could also work better by having most of the video being at the black hole and through to the other side. At the very least it is clear that I now have a better understanding of what story aspects are better to include in an immersive setting.
Next, I look at scene composition and assets. I am happy with the assets I created and I think they look visually pleasing and fit the story well. I also think that the scenes look visually pleasing with the way the assets are placed. This being said to be critical I would say that the majority of what is happening in the scene is happening in the front, in part this is limited by the character being inside a ship with a limited viewing radius and if I was to remake the ship design I may opt for a larger field of view. In addition, I also came to the decision to not give the viewer’s character arms or a body as for one the ship doesn’t require physical control and second for a decent portion of the video the viewer is looking through the drone’s lens and therefore would not have any kind of body, However, it is worth noting that I could have added a body and it would have given some scenes more immersion.
One last point that I will make is the reference to the source material. Although the story does have ties to the rabbit hole and the introduction does reference Alice, I do believe that the story could have contained less subtle references, the main way I would have improved this was by including additional characters from the original story such as the Cheshire Cat or the Mock Turtle. I think with the inclusion of these characters the viewer would have an easier time associating this story with the original.